Watermelon
Sniff Sniff..?! The smell of it was the sweet,
sweet juiciness from it's fresh flesh up my nose.
I kept my brown eyes locked onto it.
The pips gave me an anxious and annoyed expression.
The juice kept me
lured in…
Once my fleshy hand got hold of the rock solid rind,
my mouth watered and my teeth sank into the goodness.
Slurp..!
Mm... my mouth was delighted and happy for the goodness of the red half circle sliced in half.
“I love this!” I screamed in my head.
the divine fruit dripped and leaked out onto my hands.
The taste of the fruit was like all of my favourite fruits
combined into the fruit itself.
It sounded like Crunchy
chocolate in my mouth all at once.
Hello, Mia~!
ReplyDeleteI really admired the strong, descriptive writing Language you've used in your writing about Watermelon, keep the describing up.
I like the similes you've used in this descriptive piece of writing. They're well used, and is eye-catching.
You might want to work on making the title more eye-catching and descriptive, just like your writing.
Sincerely,
Emerald Akroyd.
Wow
ReplyDeleteTexture, satisfaction, expressionism, all strengths of descriptive writing and it makes one feel a part of what your trying to relate.
I enjoyed this piece.